2: pg. 2

February 27th, 2018, 5:16 pm

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-still can't draw birds-

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ShadowStalker1128, February 27th, 2018, 5:16 pm     Reply

Hey, so, sorry about the confusion on the last page. The cat didn't merge into the hawk, okay? And I'm not saying this to drive you off a trail; I mean it. I should've made the hawk a different color X,D

Advertisement, March 23rd, 2018, 7:29 am     Reply

ShadowStalker1128, February 27th, 2018, 5:24 pm     Reply

@TheMewgon40: whoops my bad

um Dusty is behind them. It's called 'camera angles', or some shit like that pffft. Like you're looking at the back of Dusty's head. Panel order is obvious, left to right XDDD

Oh wait you mean my lazy panel background stuff in those middle two. That's not the actual background lmao

ShadowStalker1128, February 27th, 2018, 5:33 pm     Reply

@TheMewgon40: um left to right??? in rows??? That's damn obvious to me XD

The blue isn't the actual background
like you can't see Dusty behind them because-
like you know how people don't want to make backgrounds so they just add gradients? It's like that pffft

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TheMewgon40, February 27th, 2018, 5:22 pm     Reply

@ShadowStalker1128: A tip- in the second panel, it'd be a lot easier to read if the second part of the speech bubble was the first. Instead of "...and small grey cats with blue eyes" and then "They only go after kits...", switch 'em around. It's a lot easier to read like that.

No offense, but the whole page is a little confusing. Not to say that the art is bad (it's great, as always <3), but the mid-section is very confusing. Which panel is first? The actual first panel? No, that can't be right- Dusty seems to be behind Hawksoar and Breezeclaw. Is the second the first, second, or third? Same problem with the last one...
Basically, the layout's confusing on this one. Try to make it a little bit more clear where everything is for the next page and onward. <3

also FIRST :P

KittenFiesta, February 27th, 2018, 5:25 pm     Reply

woa page

WiispNightmare, February 27th, 2018, 5:30 pm     Reply

I for one had my fill of cackles while everyone theorized about the cat turning into the hawk

Hawksoar no don't scare the sparky bean

TheMewgon40, February 27th, 2018, 5:31 pm     Reply

@ShadowStalker1128: the panel order isn't SUPER obvious. .3.


Midnight-fox18, February 27th, 2018, 5:41 pm     Reply

Don’t worry, the panel order didn’t confuse me! Or the text order, I think it’s all fine ^^

Loving Hawksoar’s personality, what he said in the second panel and Dusty’s beautiful reaction made me smile XD

TheMewgon40, February 27th, 2018, 5:53 pm     Reply

@ShadowStalker1128: not obvious to me
oh well .3.

it's thattt
alright, thanks for clearing up some of the confusion <3

Sky207, February 27th, 2018, 6:15 pm     Reply

poor dusty

shinyumbreon888, February 27th, 2018, 6:30 pm     Reply

Yay a page!

LightEclipse, February 27th, 2018, 8:09 pm     Reply

Breezeclaw is not amused

Also cough cough cOUGH reminder ring for Le page

WildfireK, February 28th, 2018, 8:22 am     Reply

Heeyyyy look who's late XDD

Nice page Shad! :D
Love the texture and detail
Panels aren't confusing :3

Silver Eevee, February 28th, 2018, 11:51 am     Reply

FRICK YOUR ART GETS BETTER EVERY DAY qwertyuiopasdfghjklzxcvbnm

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Silver Eevee, March 21st, 2018, 2:20 pm     Reply

@BlueEevee362: Do you mean Scourge or Scrouge

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